Wednesday, 17 September 2014

The (other) woman.

In the heat of the moment,
I scratch your back with my nails,
So that when you lie down with her,
She is going to know,
Know that I was here.




But that deep welt on your neck,
Did she put it there?
Was she also marking her territory,
So I would also know,
Know that she was there?

I let my perfume mix with your cologne,
Let you run your hands into my perfumed hair,
So that if or when you go to her next,
She is going to smell me on you,
And know that,
Know that I was here.

But that sweet smell on your body,
Is it a mixture of her scent and yours?
Were you in her arms then?
And did she rub her perfume onto you
So that I would smell her on you,
And know that,
Know that she was there?

When she kisses you,
Does she taste me on your lips,
On your palate and tongue.

And when I kiss you,
Is it her I taste on your lips,
On your palate and your tongue?


4 comments:

  1. Very interesting. I like it. It written in a simple manner bringing out the double-edged element of such situations. If you do edit afterwards 2 considerations would be: 1 - In the 4th stanza you could have used another sense like touch. The way he rubs her could be because of the practice he has had rubbing you or the other way round. 2. The sexual intensity does not come out too much (unless this is what you wanted) coz such situation are about intensity. the last stanza could have been cladded in sharp sexual imagery. It would have a shock effect and make the poem even more memorable. Something like "And when you pierce me, is the sensation borrowed from her loins..." or you would know better. But great read...

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  2. Thank you Patrick for your feedback, glad you found time to read through my piece. Your contribution is soo appreciated. :)

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  3. Thank you Patrick for your feedback, glad you found time to read through my piece. Your contribution is soo appreciated. :)

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  4. No prob. Alert me when u next post. @krugamotion. Was looking for writing inspiration so zikomo. Hopefully something will start streaming soon...

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